
She walked quietly and briskly with her head down. Her hands were in the pockets of her oversized hoodies and she was breathing heavily. She had always hated the dark and walking on a dark sidewalk in the middle of the night was not where she wanted to be right now but she needed to get home as soon as possible. This street was known for being extremely dangerous and being a petite woman in her twenties did not help. She was hyper aware of every sound around her and she knew almost instantly when someone began to follow her. Her heart beat faster as he got closer and closer.
“What’s a pretty young thing like you doing all alone? Want me to walk you home and keep you safe?” he asked smirking. He had gotten so close to her by now that she could smell the alcohol in his breath and the stench of urine on his clothes. She tried to walk faster but he grabbed her shoulders trying to force her to turn around. “Don’t touch me,” she screamed. Out came the knife and in a few seconds there was blood everywhere. Three murders in one night- she was definitely going to have to burn this hoodie.
This was my first attempt at a microfiction tale- I’ve seen a lot of other bloggers do microfiction tales and I thought it would be fun to try it out myself. Let me know what you thought of it in the comments below or simply stop by and say hi because I always love hearing from you guys!
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What a surprise ending. LOL.
Lol thanks!
Wasn’t expecting that.
Thanks!
Love a good twist ending! an unfortunately common story made uncommon
Thank you- yeah I wanted it to be super common with a twist ending!
Good one. Liked the twist.
Thank you!
Enjoyed the post.
Thanks!
I love the unpredictable ending!
Thank you!!
Kind of violent for my taste. Well written, but kind of violent.
Thanks. It’s definitely not for everyone but I’m definitely a big fan of horror so that’s where this came from.
“What happens in the dark is reaveled in the light of day (Why)?
for the darkest Hour is just before Dawn!” _-Van Prince
A bit creepy, well done. 😊
Thanks!
Dang. He should have listened!
She did warn him…
I’m obsessed 😍 Great Job 👏🏽 🖤
Thank you!!
Whoa, didn’t expect that ending. That was awesome how it caught me by surprise. You have a knack for fiction, Pooja!
Aww thank you so much!!
Lovedddd the ending omg!!! Definitely want more microfiction!!!
Thank you so much- more coming soon!!
Yayy!!!!
Good one, but kinda scary for me.
Thank you!
Underestimated the small petite woman😂🔪
Yes exactly!
Nice one
Thanks!
I absolutely loved your microfiction blog Pooja. Looking forward to more such blogs.♥️🧡
Thank you so much- more coming soon!!
Hii, can I just send my posts?
Good one
Thanks!
Lovely twist…
Thank you!
Superbly evoked
Thank you!
You’re welcome
Wow! She really??? Damnnnnnn
Lovely! More of this, Pooja.
Haha thank you!!
Ohhhhh spooky 😉😉😉👏👏👏
Loved the ending💖💖💖
Thank you!!
Oooooooh 🙀🙀🙀🙀love that ending
Thank you!!
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I guess the moral of the story – don’t mess with petite women!
Lol exactly!
I so much love the twist😍
Aww thank you so much!
Great twist. I’d love to read more micro-fiction stories 😊
Thank you!!
You give this a great chilling feel throughout. Nice work! More micro fiction would be great; if you are looking to do micro fiction and flash more regularly, I would recommend reading Kathy Fish for inspiration.
Thanks and I will check out her blog for sure!
She writes flash fiction collection books too!
Wow! What an ending! Great writing 😎👏🏼
Thank you!!
Well written . I love the twist . It kind of scare me .
Thank you!
Welcome 🤗
Wow! Didn’t see that one coming. Don’t underestimate the power of the petite.
Yes absolutely!!
Excellent publishing
Thanks!
This was great. If this is how you write non fiction keep it up. I never saw the ending coming
Laugh because… Why not??
Interesting
Most welcome
Oh wow! Now I need to hear about the first two! Very good!!!
Wow! The end… Would love to read more from you.
Nicee one!!
Thank you!
Yikes! More please. It’s like you have the Midas writer’s touch. Every genre you touch becomes gold in your hands👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾
Thanks so much! Sorry for the late reply you were stuck in my spam for some reason.
Woah! You got me there! I’m off to get a cup of tea to recover!!
Haha tea always makes everything better!
Hi
Great piece of flash fiction. Love the twist.
Thank you so much!
Reblogged this on Love and Love Alone.
Thank you!
Very nice but end was very abrupt.
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A surprise reading about a woman who commits crime in self defense, in a situation women can even experience in the bright light of day on a lonely road. Nice writing!
I was taken in and given a big surprise ending. Loved it!
Thank you so much!
Woah! Fascinating and totally not what my expected! Wonderful job ✨✨
Thank you!
Really interesting one👍👍
Thanks!
raw beauty
Great read. I’m relatively new to blogging and this is my first read of a microfiction post. Will definitely research more. Please post more! 🙂
Thanks so much- really glad you enjoyed it and I will definitely be posting more!
Please finish the story
That was it
Wow! Wasn’t expecting this ending! Loved it!
Thank you!
Great one, i think you are going to be the next Sidney Sheldon.
Oh wow thank you that’s such a huge compliment!
‘Twas an interesting, but short schpiel. My recommendation with descriptors is : immerse yourself in that scene and describe in articulate detail(s) that come to mind. People love being entranced by the descriptors that you leave little to the imagination. Also, be wary of confusing items like: hands were in the oversized pockets of her hoodies. This will lose a literalist. How many hoodies was she wearing at this precise moment. Also : dark sidewalk. That also is a bit ambiguous. Was this particular sidewalk colored to be so dark, which would make it virtually impossible to see in the dark of night. Explain more to extract any confusion in your descriptors. I think you are definitely on the right road to write some pretty cool shit. This isn’t to be interpreted that I came to troll your or shit on your attempt, but moreover to alleviate confusion which can happen with the best of writers. Keep up the good work!
Thank you for the advice I will definitely keep it mind!
Loved the ending!!
I didn’t quite understand the ending.
Oh wow! I definitely wasn’t expecting that. You’re always keeping us on our toes!
Haha surprise endings are always the most fun to write!
The ending lol
I liked the story. It was filled with suspende.
Superb. You provided great imagery. Amazing job