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I gaze into his eyes

One last time

The eyes that made me fall in love

The eyes that I thought

I would spend forever with

Knowing that those were only dreams

That this will be our last time together

Breaks my heart

I remember us standing at the alter together

Ready to say our vows

And then he changed his mind

And now he will pay

For the broken promises

With his life

“Broken Promises” was inspired by recent events. Just kidding. Or am I?

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Poetry is a funny thing. You can experience emotions without actually experiencing anything you write about. Us writers are such strange beings. Or perhaps it’s just me.

As I am sure you know, I am not married and I am not a big fan of marriage in general. It works for some and it doesn’t work for others. The reason this poem came about is because I was looking at prompts and saw one about being left at the alter. And I thought to myself, what would I do in that situation? How would I feel in that situation? I would be sad and heartbroken. But I would also be really angry. I feel like leaving someone at the alter is such a low move. Like you humiliate them in front of everyone. You could probably have found a better way to call off the marriage. Also, like how awkward when you pick up your stuff from the house lol.

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92 responses to “Broken Promises”

  1. John Avatar
    John

    The poem is sad, I think it is because of three divorces, Pooja.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yeah, I can imagine how tough it is to go through that three times.

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      1. John Avatar
        John

        That is why I’ll never marry again…

        Reply
  2. Athousandbitsofpaper Avatar
    Athousandbitsofpaper

    Writers are fortunate, we get to have many experiences and sometimes none at all except those we imagine. This post made me think of that and be grateful I get to experience anything I want through my imagination but not have to go through everything first hand. Great read Pooja.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, very true. We get so many experiences without actually having them. And we can protect ourselves too because of that. Thanks.

      Reply
  3. Joe Hallett Avatar
    Joe Hallett

    I just finished where the crawdads sing, so your poem was synchronistic

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Oh nice, I’ve heard a lot about that movie/book.

      Reply
  4. Nicole Smith Avatar
    Nicole Smith

    I am a passive aggressive revenge getter. But I don’t forget.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      I’m like that too. I’m much more passive aggressive.

      Reply
  5. Shaunelius Sterns Avatar
    Shaunelius Sterns

    The poem is sad. Things like that actually happen sometimes. There could have been a better way to call it off. Just reading it, my heart broke. We can write about anything and feel the emotions. Sometimes my own words brings tears to my eyes. We writers are just that way. Thanks for sharing. Have a great week.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, it’s sad that they really happen. It’s true, us writers are more sensitive and intuitive. Thanks and have a great week too.

      Reply
  6. sircharlesthepoet Avatar
    sircharlesthepoet

    I’m not a big fan of marriage either. There is this study that proved that marriages “work” and people end up being in a super toxic wedlock because of the social pressure that comes with being married. In a standard wedding, you spend all this money to make this extravagant ceremony, invite a bunch of people to witness you saying “I do” and agreeing to commit to forever with someone. What happens when, before forever comes, you realize you had made a mistake or they are not the person you thought they were? Will you leave them? But then are you willing to face ALL of these people who not only witnessed but also INVESTED in your wedding? Probably not. The social pressure keeps you in an unfulfilling and toxic wedding. Wow

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      So true. A lot of times people realise they don’t want to be with the other person but it’s too late for them to leave. So they’re stuck in a marriage they can’t leave.

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      1. sircharlesthepoet Avatar
        sircharlesthepoet

        Exactly. That’s the scariest thing ever.

        Reply
  7. Shahbaz Ashraf Avatar
    Shahbaz Ashraf

    Again, poem is good, but has a sad touch about it. I think all romantic poetry is about pain, anguish and suffering either due to unrequited love or jilted lovers.
    Nevertheless, the poets have a poetic licence to imagine the things unheard of. Their imagination runs sharp, and they can come up with novel ideas. However, the readers associate themselves with these ideas and have a feeling of déjà vu.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks. Yes, I think most romantic poetry can be quite sad. It’s nice that readers and poets can associate different emotions to the same poem.

      Reply
  8. Kirsten Avatar
    Kirsten

    Love the poem!💕 I think I would become Hell if a man did that to me. The good to come out of it is that you didn’t waste years with that spouse. Marriage has its ups and downs, but whoo…. If I ever got separated from my husband I wouldn’t get married again. 😆

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lol me too, I would be so mad. Aw haha I’m sure you two are meant to last so nothing to worry about 😅

      Reply
      1. Kirsten Avatar
        Kirsten

        😄🤗

        Reply
  9. haoyando Avatar
    haoyando

    Yes, I watched several movies at least that one of the lovers gets cold feet and leaves the other at the altar. In real life, I only see this played out once. Oh, my goodness, I should write that story. Thank you for inspiring me. Yes, only once and it is a funny story. And more often, I witnessed women expecting a marriage after several years’ relationship, but the marriage never came into fruition. I think men and women have probably equal opportunities in their twenties. However as time pass, men would assume more privilege. Men get more and more opportunities in middle age and beyond while women’s opportunities dwindle. I guess this is already cliche since everybody knows.

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    1. haoyando Avatar
      haoyando

      Actually I don’t want to sound so negative but I can’t edit my own comments. LOL. I want to say women can find more interesting things in life and have a fulfilled life outside of traditional role. If we women always think men are our destiny, we will be very disheartened by the trajectory of life and the battle between the sexes. However life is not really about competitions or battles. Life is to search one’s real happiness and satisfaction.

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      1. Pooja G Avatar
        Pooja G

        Sometimes the truth is harsh lol. Very true, we often are told that the only route to happiness is marriage and kids but obviously that’s far from true for many women.

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    2. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, please do write that story I would be very interested in reading it. I’ve never witnessed that for myself. So true, men are allowed to age whereas it’s seen as a bad thing in women.

      Reply
  10. Steve Avatar
    Steve

    I thought the poem was going in one direction, but that was quite the twist at the end!

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Haha thanks!

      Reply
  11. Marlapaige Avatar
    Marlapaige

    This is a beautiful poem. At first I thought it was sad, but then it really wasn’t. That last line wasn’t a woman being sad and hurting, it was a woman taking her power back. Not in the most well-balanced way, but I can see how his pretty eyes looking at her could make her decide that they’d be just as pretty lifeless. I like how what was sad was now more of a lamenting farewell to a man and a relationship that were both once alive.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks so much. I meant the end as the woman taking back her power and control of her life. She was humiliated but this was her taking control again.

      Reply
      1. Marlapaige Avatar
        Marlapaige

        It comes through…as does a murder most foul lol

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  12. Rita Avatar
    Rita

    Love it! What a twisted mind you have (and I mean that as a sincere compliment!)

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Haha thanks, I’ll take it as a compliment!

      Reply
  13. Milena Alien Avatar
    Milena Alien

    I feel like you are still playing with this idea, not completely opposed to marriage. Yet you sort of trying to warn your valentine that it’s a risky business for her or him. It’s almost like saying, there is no way back, are you still sure? think twice

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, that’s exactly it. Wow, are you a mind reader lol.

      Reply
      1. Milena Alien Avatar
        Milena Alien

        I am

        Reply
  14. beautifully curious Avatar
    beautifully curious

    I love this so much! I🖤🖤

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thank you! 💖

      Reply
  15. Hilary Tan Avatar
    Hilary Tan

    The pain of broken promises and broken love can be overwhelming. It’s like a heavy weight that pulls us down, and no matter how hard we try, we can’t seem to escape it. We can’t forget the words that were said, the promises that were made, and the feelings that were shared. We can’t forget the moments of joy, the laughter, and the love that was once there. But now, all that remains is a broken heart, shattered dreams, and a future that looks bleak. We can’t help but feel lost, confused, and alone. We can’t help but feel that our trust has been betrayed and our hearts have been broken. We can’t help but feel like our dreams and hopes have been crushed. But, even in the midst of all this pain, we still have the strength to keep going and to find our way back to love.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, you are so right. And those happy memories begin to haunt us more and more.

      Reply
  16. Vidah Avatar
    Vidah

    Loved the poem, Pooja.
    Writers are strange beings, indeed😂

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks and yes we are lol!

      Reply
  17. Destiny Avatar
    Destiny

    Sad yet lovely and touching poem Pooja…
    Can’t wait to see what you pull out when you do fall inlove😋😁

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thank you so much. Lol if that ever happens 😂

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      1. Destiny Avatar
        Destiny

        Welcome Pooja… 🤍

        Reply
  18. Vanya Wryter Consulting Avatar
    Vanya Wryter Consulting

    Well that started off sad and then ended with a scary twist.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Haha yes, I like twists in my stories and poems.

      Reply
  19. Quantez Xihuitl Avatar
    Quantez Xihuitl

    Objection Your Honor!, the counsel prohibits evidence of a person’s character or character trait is not admissible to prove that on a particular occasion the person acted in accordance with the character or trait.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      I’m hoping she never gets caught lol.

      Reply
  20. Opher Avatar
    Opher

    Was it the carving knife??

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, of course lol!

      Reply
    2. ashogbond3gmailcom Avatar
      ashogbond3gmailcom

      The word really sound inspirational nice poem

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      1. Pooja G Avatar
        Pooja G

        Thank you.

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        1. ashogbond3gmailcom Avatar
          ashogbond3gmailcom

          You are welcome pleasure to know u

          Reply
  21. Mauro's Life Avatar
    Mauro’s Life

    It’s a good poem. It’s sad, but that’s life, it happens. The big problem is not the break up itself, but how we deal with this kind of moment!

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, so true! How we react is the main part.

      Reply
  22. DEVANG UPADHYAYA Avatar
    DEVANG UPADHYAYA

    You needed a knief image with blood in the cover pic, oh what a fun.

    An interesting poem PG. You write beautifully (And I think you know that too).
    However, I still believe in marriage, and I’m still looking for a bride. So, if that girl is not marrying the dude, I’m available.

    About you, I see in your future, you will get married in year 2030. I will stick around to prove myself right. Haha

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lol, that would have given the end away.
      .
      Thanks so much. Do you really want to marry her? She’s deranged 😂 Maybe find a sane bride instead 😅
      .
      Lol, if I get married in 2030 you’re invited 😅

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      1. DEVANG UPADHYAYA Avatar
        DEVANG UPADHYAYA

        Even if you get married before 2030, I’m invited 😝
        Blogging community invited me.
        I’m confident, I’ll just wait. 😀

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        1. Pooja G Avatar
          Pooja G

          Lol. of course 😂

          Reply
  23. Anjali Avatar
    Anjali

    Your poem reminded me of Taylo swift’s Reputation album, lol!
    Talking of marriages, I love that concept of commitment and everything else, but lately I’m scared of that term. What if it doesn’t work for me or what if I get betrayed??? It’s too scary to handle a broken marriage.
    I know, it’s not my age to get married, but as you know Indian parents! The moment you turn 20, they start thinking of your marriage!!!!!!!!!

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      I love her and that album!
      Yeah, that’s the thing. Like people change so much what if your husband changes and becomes a bad person. It’s really scary. Lol, I understand. There’s so much marriage pressure for us.

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      1. Anjali Avatar
        Anjali

        Glad to know you love her too, don’t know why but it feels good to meet other swifties, maybe I’m just crazy, lol!
        Exactly! Life and people are just too much unpredictable.

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        1. Pooja G Avatar
          Pooja G

          Lol no it’s fun, my bestie and I are both Swifties!

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          1. Anjali Avatar
            Anjali

            That’s great!!!!

            Reply
  24. Karen Avatar
    Karen

    I didn’t want it to end. Can you write us a sequel?

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks, I usually end my poems with cliffhangers but since you asked I’ll try to write a sequel.

      Reply
  25. Doug Avatar
    Doug

    I’m glad the narrator give this poem to you so that you could present it to us. I saw this wedding. They built a large platform under a tree where her Father was sitting on a branch with a rope. When the groom changed his mind, he threw a noose over his head, a trapdoor opened under the groom, the noose tightened and he was strangled to death. When the police arrived they told her family to stop cheering. The Father escaped on a helicopter. The bride was tearful, but no one knows for whom.
        It was kind of you to help her write this. I hope they don’t make you a witness or conspirator.
        Good poem.

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    1. Doug Avatar
      Doug

      Ooops. Typo again[yeah we do need that edit feature] “gave” not “give”

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    2. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, let’s hope the cops never find this poem and it was definitely nice of her to share her story with me which inspired this poem lol.

      Reply
  26. gizmos16201 Avatar
    gizmos16201

    I can relate to your post extremely well, we share that marriage just is not right for us. I love how you are inspired in the topics that you write about, they are always interesting and easy for us all to relate to.

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thank you. Yes, marriage is definitely not for everyone. And that’s okay.

      Reply
      1. gizmos16201 Avatar
        gizmos16201

        Yes I agree, we all must make that choice for ourselves

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  27. Phanuel Ayelum Avatar
    Phanuel Ayelum

    I absolutely loved the poem. The transition of emotion from sadness to anger is so well laid out, I could feel myself getting enraged towards the end of it hah!
    And I agree with your perspective on the art of writing. Truly remarkable that we don’t even need to have experienced the things we can write about. It could be a form of empathy, perhaps, to be able to capture the depths of emotions that would hypothetically be felt by someone in a hypothetical situation… Like acting, but with words

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thank you so much, that’s such a compliment!
      Yes, writing is such a fascinating thing. It allows us to walk in someone else’s shoes and experience so many things.

      Reply
  28. Warrior Zen FM Avatar
    Warrior Zen FM

    *This is a companion piece to your poem but from the perspective of a guy*

    Promises Kept
    _________________

    Her captivating touch

    A temporal gateway to ecstasy

    My quest, to bind our love

    sweet permanence of matrimony

    represented by a diamond

    Strong, immutable and divine

    The day of unification came

    And I stood alone for the crowd

    My vows, rehearsed and soul forged

    My heart a victim

    of capricious and fleeting happiness

    my contempt smashed the diamond

    leaving my spirit to drift slowly

    into solitude

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    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Oh wow, I love that. Thanks so much for sharing it.

      Reply
  29. Tamara Kulish from https://tamarakulish.com/ Avatar
    Tamara Kulish from https://tamarakulish.com/

    Dark twist at the end! If ever you do go over the edge one day, the investigators will look at your poems, and declare “She’s guilty!”… LOL!

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lol, maybe I’ll have to delete this site before losing it 😂

      Reply
      1. Tamara Kulish from https://tamarakulish.com/ Avatar
        Tamara Kulish from https://tamarakulish.com/

        😀😆😁

        Reply
  30. Sara Flower Kjeldsen Avatar
    Sara Flower Kjeldsen

    My goodness! The twist at the end. :O

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Haha thanks!

      Reply
  31. Janice Reid Avatar
    Janice Reid

    Agreed, that is a really cold-hearted thing to do!

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      For sure!

      Reply
  32. Divya Goyal Avatar
    Divya Goyal

    Ouch! That hurt real bad!
    PS- Yes, we writers experience things we haven’t actually experienced.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks and yes we do!

      Reply
  33. bigskybuckeye Avatar
    bigskybuckeye

    Life around us provides nearly unlimited themes for poetry. Thank you for sharing yours.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yeah it really does. Thanks.

      Reply
  34. simply_mwanza Avatar
    simply_mwanza

    You are write. People used to wonder how I would write “romantic” high school letters for people when I wasn’t in “relationships myself. It’s all from point of view. And naturally, humans are more the same than they are different

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, it’s all about being able to put yourself in someone else’s shoes.

      Reply
      1. simply_mwanza Avatar
        simply_mwanza

        Yes please. Only the expression of emotions are different but the emotions are the same across the board. And writing immortalizes the emotions that’s why someone is able to express someone else’s emotions and experiences

        Reply
  35. dustyreviewer Avatar
    dustyreviewer

    I liked your poem, but then that “inspired by” line and the Dwight gif cracked me up. I agree about poetry writing. It feels like tapping into something that goes beyond oneself. So it often ends up expressing things the writer has never experienced personally.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Haha thanks. Yeah, it really is like tapping into something beyond oneself. You get to experience things you haven’t really experienced.

      Reply
  36. My Rollercoaster Journey Avatar
    My Rollercoaster Journey

    Loved the poem, and I totally get what you mean. I can watch a movie or read something and then write a poem about it as if I experienced it.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yeah, it really feels like you’ve experienced it.

      Reply

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