Lifesfinewhine

The Life & Ramblings Of A Zillennial

The Jilted Lover

The Jilted Lover, Love Is Messy | Six Word Story

The jilted lover

Oh, how I loved her

She was my everything

And that’s why I bought her that ring

I hid in her bedroom to surprise her

As she walked in with another

They were passionately kissing

And my heart was breaking

How could I have been so blind?

But in that rage I did find

A solution to my problems with her

And it was murder

I pulled out my gun

And proceeded to end their fun

She yelled, “who are you? How did you get in”

But all I could think of was her sin

I pulled the trigger

And her eyes grew bigger

As his body hit the floor

She ran for the door

But I caught her just in time

The spoils of my crime

Forever mine.

It’s the day of the week where I post poetry and it also happens to be Valentines Day. A day I absolutely loathe because of the way it has become commercialised. However, if you are celebrating it, have fun and don’t take offence. I just hate commercialism, it’s nothing personal.

I knew I wanted to write a poem like this since it’s Valentines Day and I love horror and twists. And that is what inspired “The Jilted Lover” and its darker themes. I’ve also been watching a lot of “You” over the last few days so that may have something to do with it too…

Do you celebrate Valentines Day? If so, how did you spend it? What did you think of the poem? Let me know in the comments!

For more poetry click here.

If you enjoyed this post don’t forget to like, follow, share and comment!

Enjoyed this post? Then follow me on social media:

YouTube Twitter Instagram Pinterest LinkedIn

Email me on(guest posts welcome!): insomniacwithanaccent@gmail.com

Lifesfinewhine Services

, , , , , , , , , , ,

Posted by:

Pooja G

91 responses to “The Jilted Lover”

  1. Doug Avatar
    Doug

    It’s good to see that you’re getting more bold and brave to write in first person. Depending on the subject it can be a problem. I used to write exclusively in first person and sometimes I got into trouble because people sometimes assumed I was the narrator of the poem. In extreme cases I’ve had to use a pseudonym. Some of the characters in my blog novel have written poems. It gets to be tricky and I’m not exactly sure about protocol. Sometimes I use a byline with quote marks for the author’s name. On the other hand, I sometimes want to stay in character because it’s more believable that way. At the same time I want credit for it as myself. Sometimes I’m jealous of myself when someone likes my pseudonym’s writing better than me.
        I enjoyed the poem. You should murder more often.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks so much. Yes, writing in first person is quite fun sometimes. And using pseudonyms can be fun too until people prefer them over the real you…
      Maybe don’t type the words “murder more” you may be put on some sort of list lol 😂

      Reply
  2. Feets Avatar
    Feets

    I know you probably weren’t thinking of the response, but what in the world?😳😀 What is going on with man?! Is he a stalker? I-

    This is so well ridden that it had some stunned.

    Reply
    1. Feets Avatar
      Feets

      *written *had me

      Idk what was going on with my spelling.😂😂😂

      Reply
      1. Pooja G Avatar
        Pooja G

        Lol it’s fine, I assumed that’s what you meant 😂

        Reply
    2. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Haha thanks so much, I’m glad it left you stunned. That’s the response I was looking for 😂

      Reply
  3. dumbestblogger Avatar
    dumbestblogger

    Murder is the only solution.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Agreed.

      Reply
  4. ianscyberspace Avatar
    ianscyberspace

    It certainly pays to have good locks on the home. LOL. Every day is a Valentine’s Day.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, and some extra security lol. Absolutely, we should show people we love them every day.

      Reply
  5. O.D. Avatar
    O.D.

    Lol I saw the “You” inspiration from a mile away. I wish we could follow the character in your poem for a sequel or something haha 😀

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      I’m sure he would just end up in Europe 😉

      Reply
      1. O.D. Avatar
        O.D.

        With a full beard 😜

        Reply
  6. DEVANG UPADHYAYA Avatar
    DEVANG UPADHYAYA

    Wah PG, what a perfect day to share this poem 😝.
    I feel like you did it intentionally. Like obviously, you could have shared something else, but due to your annoyance with the day you choose to share this one. And, I love it 😅.
    .
    As you have said this day or anything other day is commercialized a lot, and that takes away the beauty of the day.
    First of all I don’t know why are we celebrating this stupid day anyway, like what’s a need to have a specific day?
    Does this mean, we cannot love others on other 364 days.
    Then to make it further commercialize, there are additional days like kiss day, hug day, teddy day. I believe it’s just a BS, to sell stuff. 😒
    .
    Speaking about your poem, oh what a terrific poet you are PG. I really love your work and no-one knows what to expect from you, because you are like a water, your work can take any shape and form.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lol of course it was intentional. I hate commercialism and Valentine’s Day enough to do that 😂
      .
      We absolutely don’t need a day in particular to love people or show them that they are loved. Everyday should be that way.
      .
      Haha thanks. I like making sure no one knows my next move 😂

      Reply
      1. DEVANG UPADHYAYA Avatar
        DEVANG UPADHYAYA

        Atleast I saw your video on IG, so I don’t think you are completely against the idea of love! 😅.
        .
        No one can know your next move. 😝

        Reply
        1. Pooja G Avatar
          Pooja G

          Nah, I just made that for attention 😂

          Reply
          1. DEVANG UPADHYAYA Avatar
            DEVANG UPADHYAYA

            🤦🏻‍♂️😅😝

            Reply
  7. Shahbaz Ashraf Avatar
    Shahbaz Ashraf

    You have killed commercialism by triggering the gun. OMG.

    Reply
    1. Shahbaz Ashraf Avatar
      Shahbaz Ashraf

      Unlike classic romantic poetry where lovers suffer silently when they are jilted, the modern breed of lovers don’t heave sighs or suffer in silence. They believe in action and rush to settle scores with their rivals.
      Anyway, good poem on this highly commercializd day. Agree with you Pooja that commercialization has entered into every aspect of our lives, and has spoiled the beauty. Even your post on Self Care on the other day was also lamenting the same thing. But, unfortunately this is the sad reality of our times, and we seem to be helpless.

      Reply
      1. Pooja G Avatar
        Pooja G

        Yes, so true. When you read classic romances, the jilted lovers just live with the pain. Now it’s all about taking action.
        Thanks and yes, it seems most things have become highly commercialised now.

        Reply
    2. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Haha I wish 😂

      Reply
  8. Rita Avatar
    Rita

    Love the poem! Who says Valentine’s day can’t have a little murderous fun?!!! It didn’t start out that way, though. It started with a priest who would marry people in secret because of a ban on marriages. Now it’s all candy hearts and schmaltz! 🤢

    Reply
    1. Feets Avatar
      Feets

      Oh wow, that’s some interesting history!

      Reply
    2. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Haha absolutely!

      Yes, I’ve read about that. Valentine’s Day started out for such a sweet cause but it’s really been destroyed now by these major companies that are full of greed.

      Reply
  9. ofaworkingmom Avatar
    ofaworkingmom

    Happily married for years and I must agree, Valentines Day is over commercialized. I only have one ask for the day…a break from dinner,, which I got. 😊 Happy life in its simplest form.

    Sticking with simplicity, I hope you had a very nice day, Love! 😘

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, it is. I think a simple and sweet Valentine’s Day is the way to go. Hope you had a nice dinner (not cooked by you haha) 😊

      Reply
      1. ofaworkingmom Avatar
        ofaworkingmom

        Any dinner not cooked by me is always delicious! 🤣

        Reply
        1. Pooja G Avatar
          Pooja G

          Nooo I’m sure you’re a great cook too!

          Reply
          1. ofaworkingmom Avatar
            ofaworkingmom

            Lol…I am. It’s a saying here that food always tastes better when someone else puts the effort to make it. 😉

            Reply
            1. Pooja G Avatar
              Pooja G

              Yeah, that’s so true. It just tastes better when someone else is doing the cooking 😅

              Reply
  10. Hilary Tan Avatar
    Hilary Tan

    I don’t loath Valentines Day, but I give you credit for writing a rather unsettling poem lol

    Valentines Day is just another day to me. As a kid my mom would give me a gift on Valentines Day but she stopped once I moved out. Valentine’s Day is to be celebrated by everyone, including the children. It’s a special day for everyone, not just couples.

    I wasn’t expecting anything today but my husband surprised me with a Lego Orchid which I’ve been looking for… for months. I’m excited to build it! He also brought home a coffee for me which was really thoughtful 🥰

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lol thanks. Unsettling is my brand 😂

      Aw that’s so sweet. I remember you saying you love flowers but you can’t have them in the house cos of the cat. This is a nice solution to that.

      Reply
  11. Nicole Smith Avatar
    Nicole Smith

    I love love, but I don’t go all in on Valentine’s Day. I usually write my girls a note with reasons why they are awesome and loved and get my hubby a card. I do use it as an excuse to order pizza, because love should mean I don’t have to cook. Also, I love how dark this was, like he didn’t even know the girl, he was stalking her. Creepy and brutal.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Aw that’s so sweet. My sister and I usually get pizza for Valentine’s Day too. Pizza is the best way to treat yourself.
      Thanks so much.

      Reply
  12. tist Avatar
    tist

    Every day is the perfect day to love tenderly, honestly, and with all of your being. Happy Day 45 of 2023. 💜

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, absolutely every day should be that way. Happy Day 45 of 2023 too 😊

      Reply
  13. Destiny Avatar
    Destiny

    Love your poem Pooja👌
    It was like a whole story in a few words. Perfect for Valentines😁

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks so much, haha yes very Valentine’s Day themed 😅

      Reply
  14. Vidah Avatar
    Vidah

    Loved it!
    What a perfect day to share this one😂

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lol thank you 😂

      Reply
  15. sentikijamir Avatar
    sentikijamir

    I love the poem! One of your best! 💖

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thank you so much! 😊💖

      Reply
  16. Anjali Avatar
    Anjali

    Wow, what a great day to share such a poem!!😂
    It was fun reading it.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lol, thank you so much 😅

      Reply
  17. Shaunelius Sterns Avatar
    Shaunelius Sterns

    He was scorned, heartbroken, and hurt. He let his rage he was feeling on the inside dictate the outcome of this fatal tragedy. He couldn’t stand what he saw, so he did what he thought he had to do to make the pain he was feeling subside. This is what I saw in the poem while reading it. Great poem. Thanks for sharing.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, I think all interpretations are different but valid. I wanted to keep this poem open ended so everyone can interpret it in their own way. Thank you so much.

      Reply
      1. Shaunelius Sterns Avatar
        Shaunelius Sterns

        You’re welcome.

        Reply
  18. utahan15 Avatar
    utahan15

    mine yours
    ete summer
    some are
    and most are not

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, most are not.

      Reply
  19. BabyFunbo Avatar
    BabyFunbo

    I posted a book review yesterday without realising it was Valentine’s Day. 😂
    Loved the poem. Murder is of course the solution 😌😂

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lol sounds about right 😂 Thanks so much and yes it can sometimes be 😉😜

      Reply
  20. marouabourni Avatar
    marouabourni

    I’ve enjoyed reading it ☺️

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thank you so much 😊

      Reply
  21. Christopher Avatar
    Christopher

    My wife and I do not really celebrate Valentine’s Day, and I agree with you on the commercialism. We do acknowledge it, and my wife likes to do something special for the kids like getting them chocolates and sometimes something else. I appreciate the irony of the poem on Valentine’s Day.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Yes, I think small celebrations are okay but Valentine’s Day shouldn’t only about gifts and spending money. Yours sounds nice and thanks.

      Reply
  22. Steve Avatar
    Steve

    My sweety and I exchange Valentine’s Day cards but don’t do the big commercial thing. To me, every day should be one that you show love, not just February 14.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      That’s so sweet and yes exactly. If you love someone, show them that every day.

      Reply
  23. Mark Edward Jabbour Avatar
    Mark Edward Jabbour

    No, I don’t. Nevertheless, I just watched an Ally McBeal episode that matches your poem. Ally’s firm got the defendant off with a defense of “temporary insanity”. It was really good. I highly recommend the series (1998-2002) on Prime and Hulu. Ally’s a narcissistic, romantic fool. Great soundtrack. Great characters and stories.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Sounds like an interesting show, I’ll check it out. Thanks for the recommendation.

      Reply
  24. haoyando Avatar
    haoyando

    I forgot it was Valentine’s day yesterday and I only thought about it today when I had some time in the morning. LOL. And a wonderful horror and mystery piece. Somehow your story reminds me of Freida McFadden, which you introduced me to with your post on “the housemaid”.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lol yeah, if you don’t really care about Valentine’s Day as many of us don’t it’s easy to forget. Haha thanks so much.

      Reply
  25. Kirsten Avatar
    Kirsten

    Perfect for Valentine’s Day, I enjoyed this poem. Thriller! ❤️

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thank you, haha! 💖

      Reply
  26. WellsFiction Avatar
    WellsFiction

    Nooo! How could you, Pooja lol. HVD friend.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Haha thanks, HVD 🙂

      Reply
  27. Milena Alien Avatar
    Milena Alien

    Find the solution,
    Start the revolution,
    Burn the place down,
    But don’t touch her crown.
    Royal romance
    Will leave you no chance
    Be there
    Even if they don’t care,
    Just stand and stare
    In the midst of glitz and glare.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Loved it and yes I rapped it.

      Reply
      1. Milena Alien Avatar
        Milena Alien

        i knew you would

        Reply
  28. Janice Reid Avatar
    Janice Reid

    Wow Pooja this is tough, now I’m looking at you out of the corner of my eyes 🤣🤣.

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lollll 😂

      Reply
  29. Max Ethan Avatar
    Max Ethan

    It certainly pays to have good locks on the home. LOL. Every day is a Valentine’s Day.

    Reply
  30. Nupur Avatar
    Nupur

    ❤️❤️❤️❤️

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      ❤️

      Reply
  31. Pennize Pics Avatar
    Pennize Pics

    The poem was awesome. I love it! As for Valentine’s day, it’s just another day to me but I do like to send out extra I love you’s to the people I care about. Otherwise this year I went grocery shopping and then spent time with my cat.

    Reply
  32. Cindy Georgakas Avatar
    Cindy Georgakas

    Great poem Pooja! A little love and nice dinner goes a long way.. noting fancy! ❣️

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks and yes sometimes it’s the small things 😊

      Reply
      1. Cindy Georgakas Avatar
        Cindy Georgakas

        you’re welcome. it’s the small things that matter most! ❣️

        Reply
  33. R Carter Avatar
    R Carter

    Great poem… Love and horror always a good combination. I 100% agree that valentines day is just another money making scheme

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks and yeah most of these holidays have turned into money making schemes.

      Reply
  34. gizmos16201 Avatar
    gizmos16201

    Perfect poetry for Valentines Day, sorry I am late reading your posts but I am catching up right now

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Thanks so much and that’s okay, don’t worry.

      Reply
      1. gizmos16201 Avatar
        gizmos16201

        It is good to read your posts again today, I read you might not be posting as regular due to life and I understand that too well

        Reply
        1. Pooja G Avatar
          Pooja G

          I just won’t be very active this week but after that I’ll be back to normal.

          Reply
          1. gizmos16201 Avatar
            gizmos16201

            Take your much needed break, we all will be thinking of you during your time off

            Reply
            1. Pooja G Avatar
              Pooja G

              Thanks so much.

              Reply
              1. gizmos16201 Avatar
                gizmos16201

                Enjoy your day my dear friend

                Reply
  35. TCKlaire Avatar
    TCKlaire

    Commercialization of holidays drives me up the wall too!

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      It’s so annoying and kind of ruins it!

      Reply
  36. Mr. Ohh's Sideways View Avatar
    Mr. Ohh’s Sideways View

    It was then I discovered I was in the wrong house. Oops!! 🤣😎🙃

    Reply
    1. Pooja G Avatar
      Pooja G

      Lollll 😂

      Reply

Leave a Reply

Find Me On Socials!

Read My Poetry Here:

Discover more from Lifesfinewhine

Subscribe now to keep reading and get access to the full archive.

Continue reading