The jilted lover
Oh, how I loved her
She was my everything
And that’s why I bought her that ring
I hid in her bedroom to surprise her
As she walked in with another
They were passionately kissing
And my heart was breaking
How could I have been so blind?
But in that rage I did find
A solution to my problems with her
And it was murder
I pulled out my gun
And proceeded to end their fun
She yelled, “who are you? How did you get in”
But all I could think of was her sin
I pulled the trigger
And her eyes grew bigger
As his body hit the floor
She ran for the door
But I caught her just in time
The spoils of my crime
It’s the day of the week where I post poetry and it also happens to be Valentines Day. A day I absolutely loathe because of the way it has become commercialised. However, if you are celebrating it, have fun and don’t take offence. I just hate commercialism, it’s nothing personal.
I knew I wanted to write a poem like this since it’s Valentines Day and I love horror and twists. And that is what inspired “The Jilted Lover” and its darker themes. I’ve also been watching a lot of “You” over the last few days so that may have something to do with it too…
Do you celebrate Valentines Day? If so, how did you spend it? What did you think of the poem? Let me know in the comments!
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91 thoughts on “The Jilted Lover”
It’s good to see that you’re getting more bold and brave to write in first person. Depending on the subject it can be a problem. I used to write exclusively in first person and sometimes I got into trouble because people sometimes assumed I was the narrator of the poem. In extreme cases I’ve had to use a pseudonym. Some of the characters in my blog novel have written poems. It gets to be tricky and I’m not exactly sure about protocol. Sometimes I use a byline with quote marks for the author’s name. On the other hand, I sometimes want to stay in character because it’s more believable that way. At the same time I want credit for it as myself. Sometimes I’m jealous of myself when someone likes my pseudonym’s writing better than me.
I enjoyed the poem. You should murder more often.
Thanks so much. Yes, writing in first person is quite fun sometimes. And using pseudonyms can be fun too until people prefer them over the real you…
Maybe don’t type the words “murder more” you may be put on some sort of list lol 😂
I know you probably weren’t thinking of the response, but what in the world?😳😀 What is going on with man?! Is he a stalker? I-
This is so well ridden that it had some stunned.
*written *had me
Idk what was going on with my spelling.😂😂😂
Lol it’s fine, I assumed that’s what you meant 😂
Haha thanks so much, I’m glad it left you stunned. That’s the response I was looking for 😂
Murder is the only solution.
It certainly pays to have good locks on the home. LOL. Every day is a Valentine’s Day.
Yes, and some extra security lol. Absolutely, we should show people we love them every day.
Lol I saw the “You” inspiration from a mile away. I wish we could follow the character in your poem for a sequel or something haha 😀
I’m sure he would just end up in Europe 😉
With a full beard 😜
Wah PG, what a perfect day to share this poem 😝.
I feel like you did it intentionally. Like obviously, you could have shared something else, but due to your annoyance with the day you choose to share this one. And, I love it 😅.
As you have said this day or anything other day is commercialized a lot, and that takes away the beauty of the day.
First of all I don’t know why are we celebrating this stupid day anyway, like what’s a need to have a specific day?
Does this mean, we cannot love others on other 364 days.
Then to make it further commercialize, there are additional days like kiss day, hug day, teddy day. I believe it’s just a BS, to sell stuff. 😒
Speaking about your poem, oh what a terrific poet you are PG. I really love your work and no-one knows what to expect from you, because you are like a water, your work can take any shape and form.
Lol of course it was intentional. I hate commercialism and Valentine’s Day enough to do that 😂
We absolutely don’t need a day in particular to love people or show them that they are loved. Everyday should be that way.
Haha thanks. I like making sure no one knows my next move 😂
Atleast I saw your video on IG, so I don’t think you are completely against the idea of love! 😅.
No one can know your next move. 😝
Nah, I just made that for attention 😂
You have killed commercialism by triggering the gun. OMG.
Unlike classic romantic poetry where lovers suffer silently when they are jilted, the modern breed of lovers don’t heave sighs or suffer in silence. They believe in action and rush to settle scores with their rivals.
Anyway, good poem on this highly commercializd day. Agree with you Pooja that commercialization has entered into every aspect of our lives, and has spoiled the beauty. Even your post on Self Care on the other day was also lamenting the same thing. But, unfortunately this is the sad reality of our times, and we seem to be helpless.
Yes, so true. When you read classic romances, the jilted lovers just live with the pain. Now it’s all about taking action.
Thanks and yes, it seems most things have become highly commercialised now.
Haha I wish 😂
Love the poem! Who says Valentine’s day can’t have a little murderous fun?!!! It didn’t start out that way, though. It started with a priest who would marry people in secret because of a ban on marriages. Now it’s all candy hearts and schmaltz! 🤢
Oh wow, that’s some interesting history!
Yes, I’ve read about that. Valentine’s Day started out for such a sweet cause but it’s really been destroyed now by these major companies that are full of greed.
Happily married for years and I must agree, Valentines Day is over commercialized. I only have one ask for the day…a break from dinner,, which I got. 😊 Happy life in its simplest form.
Sticking with simplicity, I hope you had a very nice day, Love! 😘
Yes, it is. I think a simple and sweet Valentine’s Day is the way to go. Hope you had a nice dinner (not cooked by you haha) 😊
Any dinner not cooked by me is always delicious! 🤣
Nooo I’m sure you’re a great cook too!
Lol…I am. It’s a saying here that food always tastes better when someone else puts the effort to make it. 😉
Yeah, that’s so true. It just tastes better when someone else is doing the cooking 😅
I don’t loath Valentines Day, but I give you credit for writing a rather unsettling poem lol
Valentines Day is just another day to me. As a kid my mom would give me a gift on Valentines Day but she stopped once I moved out. Valentine’s Day is to be celebrated by everyone, including the children. It’s a special day for everyone, not just couples.
I wasn’t expecting anything today but my husband surprised me with a Lego Orchid which I’ve been looking for… for months. I’m excited to build it! He also brought home a coffee for me which was really thoughtful 🥰
Lol thanks. Unsettling is my brand 😂
Aw that’s so sweet. I remember you saying you love flowers but you can’t have them in the house cos of the cat. This is a nice solution to that.
I love love, but I don’t go all in on Valentine’s Day. I usually write my girls a note with reasons why they are awesome and loved and get my hubby a card. I do use it as an excuse to order pizza, because love should mean I don’t have to cook. Also, I love how dark this was, like he didn’t even know the girl, he was stalking her. Creepy and brutal.
Aw that’s so sweet. My sister and I usually get pizza for Valentine’s Day too. Pizza is the best way to treat yourself.
Thanks so much.
Every day is the perfect day to love tenderly, honestly, and with all of your being. Happy Day 45 of 2023. 💜
Yes, absolutely every day should be that way. Happy Day 45 of 2023 too 😊
Love your poem Pooja👌
It was like a whole story in a few words. Perfect for Valentines😁
Thanks so much, haha yes very Valentine’s Day themed 😅
What a perfect day to share this one😂
Lol thank you 😂
I love the poem! One of your best! 💖
Thank you so much! 😊💖
Wow, what a great day to share such a poem!!😂
It was fun reading it.
Lol, thank you so much 😅
He was scorned, heartbroken, and hurt. He let his rage he was feeling on the inside dictate the outcome of this fatal tragedy. He couldn’t stand what he saw, so he did what he thought he had to do to make the pain he was feeling subside. This is what I saw in the poem while reading it. Great poem. Thanks for sharing.
Yes, I think all interpretations are different but valid. I wanted to keep this poem open ended so everyone can interpret it in their own way. Thank you so much.
and most are not
Yes, most are not.
I posted a book review yesterday without realising it was Valentine’s Day. 😂
Loved the poem. Murder is of course the solution 😌😂
Lol sounds about right 😂 Thanks so much and yes it can sometimes be 😉😜
I’ve enjoyed reading it ☺️
Thank you so much 😊
My wife and I do not really celebrate Valentine’s Day, and I agree with you on the commercialism. We do acknowledge it, and my wife likes to do something special for the kids like getting them chocolates and sometimes something else. I appreciate the irony of the poem on Valentine’s Day.
Yes, I think small celebrations are okay but Valentine’s Day shouldn’t only about gifts and spending money. Yours sounds nice and thanks.
My sweety and I exchange Valentine’s Day cards but don’t do the big commercial thing. To me, every day should be one that you show love, not just February 14.
That’s so sweet and yes exactly. If you love someone, show them that every day.
No, I don’t. Nevertheless, I just watched an Ally McBeal episode that matches your poem. Ally’s firm got the defendant off with a defense of “temporary insanity”. It was really good. I highly recommend the series (1998-2002) on Prime and Hulu. Ally’s a narcissistic, romantic fool. Great soundtrack. Great characters and stories.
Sounds like an interesting show, I’ll check it out. Thanks for the recommendation.
I forgot it was Valentine’s day yesterday and I only thought about it today when I had some time in the morning. LOL. And a wonderful horror and mystery piece. Somehow your story reminds me of Freida McFadden, which you introduced me to with your post on “the housemaid”.
Lol yeah, if you don’t really care about Valentine’s Day as many of us don’t it’s easy to forget. Haha thanks so much.
Perfect for Valentine’s Day, I enjoyed this poem. Thriller! ❤️
Thank you, haha! 💖
Nooo! How could you, Pooja lol. HVD friend.
Haha thanks, HVD 🙂
Find the solution,
Start the revolution,
Burn the place down,
But don’t touch her crown.
Will leave you no chance
Even if they don’t care,
Just stand and stare
In the midst of glitz and glare.
Loved it and yes I rapped it.
i knew you would
Wow Pooja this is tough, now I’m looking at you out of the corner of my eyes 🤣🤣.
It certainly pays to have good locks on the home. LOL. Every day is a Valentine’s Day.
The poem was awesome. I love it! As for Valentine’s day, it’s just another day to me but I do like to send out extra I love you’s to the people I care about. Otherwise this year I went grocery shopping and then spent time with my cat.
Great poem Pooja! A little love and nice dinner goes a long way.. noting fancy! ❣️
Thanks and yes sometimes it’s the small things 😊
you’re welcome. it’s the small things that matter most! ❣️
Great poem… Love and horror always a good combination. I 100% agree that valentines day is just another money making scheme
Thanks and yeah most of these holidays have turned into money making schemes.
Perfect poetry for Valentines Day, sorry I am late reading your posts but I am catching up right now
Thanks so much and that’s okay, don’t worry.
It is good to read your posts again today, I read you might not be posting as regular due to life and I understand that too well
I just won’t be very active this week but after that I’ll be back to normal.
Take your much needed break, we all will be thinking of you during your time off
Thanks so much.
Enjoy your day my dear friend
Commercialization of holidays drives me up the wall too!
It’s so annoying and kind of ruins it!
It was then I discovered I was in the wrong house. Oops!! 🤣😎🙃